Beautiful. That line about kissing her like she was going away for six years. Just beautiful.
Now I will ramble a bit about something that should be simple but isn't. The flow is just gorgeous here. So many fics would have set something like this up as a series of vignettes, or mini-chapters, but I give you major props for using art, symmetry, and phrasing to bring this into a smooth, flowing and simply wonderful story.
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Date: 2009-04-08 05:16 pm (UTC)Now I will ramble a bit about something that should be simple but isn't. The flow is just gorgeous here. So many fics would have set something like this up as a series of vignettes, or mini-chapters, but I give you major props for using art, symmetry, and phrasing to bring this into a smooth, flowing and simply wonderful story.
Kudos!